Summative Assement

Pablo
Looks: He is small, dark hair and brown eyes
Talent: Can read exrtemly fast and drinks 2 liters of water in 4.88 seconds
Deep Dark Secret: His older Brother is Gay, and likes the ugliest girl at school.
Best friend: Eddie
Worst Enemie: Pedro Juan
In his pocket carries his cellphone and Wallet.
He recently lost his favorite toy.
He is a normal student and really nice
Comments by Alejandro Samper and Lorenzo Castellanos
What is his Favorite toy? A power ranger
Is he popular? not really has few friends
Exposition:
Pablo has been bullied by Pedro Juan, he has beened bully since he decided he was in love of the ugliest girl(Mariana).(looks, and talent, Worst enemie)
Rising Action:
Pedro Juan is avaible to make the entire grade now Pablos secret.
Pablo stays quite and does not says anthing, however inside he feels terrible and mad.
He is called by the mighty Ramon and is told to try to defend his self.(Ambition, best friend, what he carries)
Climax:
Pablo does what the mighty Ramon tells and the next day he confronts Pedro Juan. When he confronts him Pedro Juan punches him and humillates him. When Pablo stand up he tells what he is feeling .Pedro is not able to respond and walks away(attitude)
Falling Action:
People starts seeing what Pedro did was not good
Pablo starts being popular.
Exposition:
Pablo forgives Pedro
Pablo and Mariana become a couple
Why it i a Myth? 
It a myth because includes gods. If it has gods it shows how people fear to them. It also explain a fenomenal like bullying. 
Bully Problem? 
Pablo secret is revealed and its start to be bothered. He is bothered by Pedro Juan  and after he is bothered, one night the mighty god Ramon arrives and he already new the problem Pablo had. Then the next day the mighty god defend Pablo and made him be respected and never bullied again.
My problems?
I had spelling mistakes. Also I had run on sentences. Therefore I had some punction errors. Also I should get more clear my ideas
Other Bird Tales Comment: 
Camila Toro: I liked you had a really organized story and was clear. Also I liked how you used the pictures to make the story more intersting! Well done!
Paula Jaramillo : I think your story was really good. But you should put some more cool pics! But for the rest you had the elements of the plot well organized.
Daniel Moreno:  Great story! your plot was well organized also Iliked how you made feelings to your characters. 
Why should I get a 4?
Because I did all the necesary and work hard on it. Also I changed my story like 50 times and did not  give up